Why Your Listeners Might Be Sleeping Through Your Every Word
Writing for spoken word is one of the least understood arts. The confusion starts with how the writer constructs the message – by writing. In school, most of our communication education was the written word. Very few of us had a speech or drama class. So, when a novice sits down to write narration, it’s natural to write in a style that we have been using our whole life for essays, letters, emails, notes, etc. When that text is actually spoken, it’s sometimes like we’re back in English class.
Do you remember your high school
English class where everyone took turns reading a
literary classic aloud? Was there anything more
boring? If you didn’t have the book in front of
you, it was hard to follow along – that is if
you stayed awake. Okay, I’m not out to bash
classic literature. I’m just raising an
argument that the author probably didn’t intend
his or her work to be read aloud (especially by
sleepy teenagers). But take Shakespeare – now
that dude knew how to write for spoken word. He
intended for hundreds of listeners to hear his words
being spoken aloud.
Now that dude knew how to write for spoken word.
The methods by which we communicate
with words can be broken down into two simple
categories: by eyes, and by ears. They’re
sometimes used together, but the most primitive form
of communication was probably by sight. Caveman Gok
would motion with his hands to caveman Krog to build
a fire. The next form of communication was most
likely a grunt when Krog told Gok to build it
himself, followed up with a hand gesture.
Today we communicate with words, art, music, dance,
and even laughter. The communicator’s hope is
that the full meaning of the message is perceived,
but sometimes the way it’s delivered is out of
sync with the way it’s being received. Like a
review of a painting in the newspaper, one
can’t fully grasp the artist’s intent
until seeing it in person.
Perhaps the hardest way to communicate is using one
form of communication to deliver another form, like
that English class. Writing for spoken word is one of
the least understood arts. The confusion starts with
how the writer constructs the message – by
writing. In school, most of our communication
education was the written word. Very few of us had a
speech or drama class. So, when a novice sits down to
write narration, it’s natural to write in a
style that we have been using our whole life for
essays, letters, emails, notes, etc. When that text
is actually spoken, it’s sometimes like
we’re back in English class.
Perhaps the hardest way to communicate is using one form of communication to deliver another form.
What’s happening? Why is the listener having trouble receiving the message? I believe that most of all, it’s sentence structure. If you’ve ever read any of Elmore Leonard’s novels (“Get Shorty,” “Jackie Brown"), you probably recognized his unique ability to write believable dialog. Leonard just brushes it off as writing what people say, but on closer analysis I believe his sentence structure is the key.
“People talk in short sentences.”
“Often incomplete ones. Usually grammatically incorrect.”
“Disconnected sometimes.”
Why? Attention span, the slowness of oral communication versus written, body gestures, and many other things contribute to the compactness of speech. When reading a written piece, your eyes can pause or scan back to solidify what you just read. With speech, you can’t reverse time and listen again. When reading, you see phrases and groups of words at one time. With speech each word is delivered one agonizing word at a time. You must wait for the next word to be said, even if you know what it will be. When writing, the author can use punctuation to group thoughts, sections and phrasing. With speech, you must use tone and inflection to separate thoughts. Like this written sentence, the author can introduce a subject such as how to make a box, expound on it for several lines to describe its shape, material, and workmanship, then veer off in another direction to tell about all the great boxes of the world and what they contain, and then return back to pound the final nail in the lid. In speech, the listener would be thinking about what to cook for supper before you finished the sentence.
With speech, you can’t reverse time and listen again.
So now you see the pitfalls. How then, do you write narration for the listener? Here are a few tips from a professional that is paid to listen:
• Remember to keep sentences
short. Give the listener time to process each nugget
of information before you move onto the next one.
• If the information is complex, reinforce it
with short examples or analogies.
• Don’t be afraid to break sentence
structure rules from time to time.
• Read your copy aloud. Better yet, have someone
read it to you. Be sure to read with a loud volume
and take deliberate breaths. This will reveal
problems with phrase lengths and timings.
• If the narration accompanies visuals, remember
that a picture is worth a thousand words –
don’t dwell on describing the obvious.
• Don’t give a lot of useless information
that isn’t vital and won’t be remembered,
such as phone numbers, addresses, dates, etc. If your
narration is to only get your name out, the listener
will look you up in the phone book.
• Don’t wear out the listener. Trying to
cram in too much information will actually have the
opposite effect on the listener – they’ll
tune out.
• Don’t just cut and paste your print copy
to the radio script. Take the very basics of the idea
you’re trying to convey and turn it into a
conversation or “theatre in the mind.”
Of course there are many other aspects of writing,
but I hope these few tips will help you avoid wasted
studio time editing copy – or worse, lose the
listener. Remember, it’s an art and it takes
lots of practice, so keep writing and reading your
copy aloud. You’ll know you’re getting
better at it when people quit falling asleep.
Neil
Kesterson is the owner of Dynamix Productions in
Lexington, KY. He has been paid to listen to other
people talk for over twenty
years.